Today, finally there were some tooth and claws, but I'm furious! River clan, once again making excuses to cross borders! Unluckily for River clan to come when the patrol that I was in saw them trying to take land. We Owned OUCH, them. Sorry, I have some scars, but it was worth it to have seen them run away like kits. OUCH. When we were there, patrolling the border, we saw Lepordfur, with the River clan deputy, and some other cats swimming to Sunning Rocks. They say that Sunning Rocks was rightfully theirs. This happened before, when Firestar, our leader just joined Thunder clan. OUCH!
Ashfur was a pro. My best friend jumped on top of a cat, and muffled with furs in his mouth to take a hard blow on the side. I did as he said, and he was blown to the river and limped back. In the middle Thornpaw went to camp to get help. Graystripe, the deputy of Thunder clan came with other Thunder clan warrior and leaped out of the bush and started backing us up.
This really captured my attention, with IM FURIOUS! And this post did follow the intro, body, and conclusion. I really liked the part where there was a little fighting.. This is great... I dont think you need to change anything... Maybe, you can make a bigger fight :)
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This intro really grabbed my attention. And like the word like Ouch or like those kind of word made me feel that im in the story.
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